grammatical errors in English writing lesson 2 by Mr.Zaki
|grammatical errors in English writing lesson 2 by Mr.Zaki|
English writing is crucial to anyone who learns English. By avoiding grammatical errors in English writing, you become a professional English writer. A lot of people have failed to immigrant to Canada or Australia or other English native countries because of the IELTS exam. They always have a low band in writing. Many students struggle to get band 7 in writing in IELTS.
How to learn from this grammatical lesson?
English short story that has grammatical errors:
English short story after correction English grammar:
A very beautiful girl lived with her mother in a very remote place in the forest; their house was covered with weeds, and they did not ensure that they had enough food before winter. Julie always dreamed of having wings and being able to land in a castle that she would be the queen. She would have a lot of jewels. One night while she was looking at meteors in the sky, she saw a strange animal. She did not know what it was at first until he approached her and talked to her. “Monster,” she shouted. The monster said: Julie, if you submit to me, I will not hurt you. Julie was terrified; she agreed to bring him these candles from the temple. “I have a question,” said Julie,” you are a monster; you scare everyone.” “Why do you ask me to get into the temple and bring the candles?” Oh, Julie, I can scare all people in the world, but I can’t overcome God. A temple is a holy place. If I go there, I will die.
Julie had no choice, and She went to the temple.
Along the way, she kept thinking about the secret behind the candle and many thoughts in her mind
Feedback on your English writing :
- We don’t link two sentences with a comma, instead, we can use, and, or a semicolon ;
- His+noun: for possessive or someone belongs to someone: his brother, his wife, his love…
- Past continuous, past simple
- We use a double quotation to say that someone says something. Also, we put the comma before the closing quotation
- Word choice: very scared= terrified